Thursday, March 18, 2010

1 Day Story, Revisited

Last week I sat down with my Picture Story professor and did a reedit of my 1 day story. We both agreed I had shot better than my original submission had indicated. This second edit is a little more conceptual (maybe?) than it is literal. I'm still not quite sure how I feel about the story presentation, but that just reiterates the point I made when I first posted this story - I over shot and wasn't focused enough. I would appreciate any and all feedback on this edit compared to my first edit.

Photos © 2010 JLenhartPhoto


Sarah Flagg said...

I like this one a ton better, but miss the picture of them doing a hands in (or whatever its called). The disco ball picture and the detail chile is mysterious at first and then you get the story. :)

Jason Lenhart said...

Thanks Sarah - yea, I miss it too, but you know how those puppies have to meet their demise eventually.

August Kryger said...

I agree with Sarah. This set is mo' betta'